It would be a little easier to help with this if we had
            more information about what exactly you are saying.  I say this because I believe that
            this passage should be split up into multiple sentences with more explanation.  Given
            the information here, this is what I would say.
This data
            has been collected through surveys.  However, we are not able to present other data that
            is directly comparable.  We are unable to do so because the surveys used to collect
            other data have not been the same as the one we used.  Therefore, the data are not
            comparable to the data we have collected.
I strongly
            believe that it is better to give more explanation in more sentences than to try to fit
            too much information into one sentence.
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